Plot: The author crafts a gripping plot that stays in the reader's mind long after the story is finished.
Prose/Style: The writing here is mostly effective but would benefit from a heavy edit to eliminate awkward phrasing, run-on sentences, and odd phrasing.
Originality: The government-dominant world depicted here is heavily reminiscent of the Hunger Games' Capitol, which controls every aspect of how people live. Yet the author is able to expand upon this foundation to create a unique and original setting.
Character Development/Execution: The author does an excellent job with character development even in the strange and oppressive world depicted. The players are well-defined and their positions on events are evident and well understood.
Date Submitted: May 11, 2021