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Cassandra Buittner
Author
Violet
A girl wakes up on a beach with no memory. She ends up finding out she is a Lightning Element and learns her powers again. Along the way, she meets other elements of earth, air, water, and fire. They are the four core, but there are more. Her father is a Metal and Mineral Element, and these weird creatures, called chimeras, keep appearing with the power of time and space. Violet has the aid of a Kitsune, a magical fox, and is jumped around the timeline. There is this bad guy, Martin Krazor, who has a machine that he uses to devour the life and essence of elements and create his own artificial elements. He has a plan to become very powerful and try to devour the legendary element spoken of in old tales and legends. He and his son, Oliver, are also Lightning Elements. In the end, Martin and Violet will have to battle for supremacy. A mysterious voice is constantly advising Violet on her journey. She finds out what that entity really is at the end.
Plot/Idea: 7 out of 10
Originality: 6 out of 10
Prose: 4 out of 10
Character/Execution: 6 out of 10
Overall: 5.75 out of 10

Assessment:

Plot/Idea: This is a supernatural fantasy about a girl who learns she is an Element who can control air and lightning powers. The plot follows a mostly linear structure, though there is some play with time and space manipulation, as a mounting battle of good and evil between near-gods  develops to an exciting climax.

Prose: Though the writing skews toward the descriptive with an emphasis on visual imagery, clumsy and imprecise phrasing can detract from the rich concept.

Originality: The character archetypes and plot arcs are reminiscent of anime tropes and structures. Within this context the scenario and setting are creative and vibrant. Throughout the book are links to K-pop songs on YouTube. Their connection to the story is unclear, but they presumably exist as conduits for particular emotions; it's unfortunate the writing isn’t trusted to do this on its own.

Character/Execution: Characterization largely props up the narrative conflict engine, with little exploration of supporting characters beyond their relationship to the plot and protagonist’s growth. The power-fantasy arc of the eponymous protagonist builds at a nice pace and reaches a satisfying climax. 

Date Submitted: August 29, 2023

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