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General Fiction

  • What Happened in Lake Erie

    by Charles L. Ross

    Rating: 7.00

    Plot: The plot could use some more attention to backstory and worldbuilding. The boy grows up; the father and son become estranged; the boy has his first and continuing gay relationships. He enters therapy to discover and better understand what happened when he was a young boy.

    Prose/Style: The prose is straightforward and smooth, with few errors. The story is told chronologically. The story engages the reader, but the prose feels a bit journalistic, or more like a memoir.

    Originality: This novel is a coming out story, the tale of a strained and finally estranged relationship between a father and a son. This particular situation feels new to the genre.

    Character Development: The reader may not understand the characters well enough due to a lack of emotional detail from some characters. Anthony feels genuine enough in his adult life - and relationships - with other men to empathize with.

  • Flygirl

    by R. D. Kardon

    Rating: 6.00

    Plot: In “Flygirl,” Kardon tells a straightforward story about one woman aspiring to fulfill her professional dreams, as she grapples with overwhelming regrets and loss. While the nuances of Tris’s path toward becoming a plane captain can be banal, interpersonal conflicts and the heroine’s clear aspirations result in a satisfying narrative arc. 

    Prose/Style: Kardon writes in even, pragmatic prose that efficiently—if unremarkably—carries the story forward to its conclusion. 

    Originality: Though the story of a professional woman struggling to succeed in a male-dominated field is a familiar one, Kardon shows a clear understanding of the world of commercial airlines and effectively captures the unique experience of operating an aircraft.

    Character Development: Kardon creates a relatable heroine in Tris, a character who, along with her grit and determination to succeed, displays a range of authentic emotions and vulnerabilities. Additional characters—including patronizing and dysfunctional colleagues—are portrayed with less subtlety.

  • Plot: This book has three storylines and more than 50 endings. Does the reader, as a character, wish to survive or die? The choices are quite endless, but the plot itself is a bit thin. Some of the segments may be used in more than one story.

    Prose/Style: The writing is fluid, with occasional grammatical errors that would be alleviated by a light proofread. The use of archaic and current seafaring terms helps put the reader into the scene.

    Originality: Certainly, this is extremely clever and quite a feat in the way the endings and beginnings are organized.

    Character Development: While the characters are colorful, they are somewhat stereotypical of ship's captains and mates and of pirates. They partake in some bawdy activities and sometimes speak coarsely. They are quite one-dimensional, and the reader doesn't get to know them intimately.

  • Surf and Sand, The Girl In the Seaside Hotel

    by W. B. Edwards

    Rating: 5.50

    Plot:  The plot itself is engaging, and the final twist is satisfying to read. The story’s twist, while gripping, appears fairly late in the book, and isn’t affirmed until the very last chapter of the novel.

    Prose/Style: The dialogue reads very realistically – especially the exchanges between the children, Lonnie and Nell. Edwards is clearly attuned to her characters’ voices. The sentences, however, can be long-winded, sometimes without proper punctuation to break up the excess of clauses. An overuse of articles and transitional words (“so,” “and,” “but,” etc.) make it difficult to follow the action of each scene.

    Originality: This is a general storyline that many fans of the thriller/mystery genre will recognize. With a bit more fine-tuning of character perspectives – expanding on specific psychologies, personal hang-ups, and idiosyncrasies – Edwards can develop the story’s originality even more.

    Character Development: The text doesn’t seem to be rooted in one specific person’s perspective. The third-person omniscient narration grazes the surface of many characters’ POVs at once, failing to delve deeply into any detailed thoughts and musings.

  • The Relic

    by Holly Harbin

    Rating: 5.00

    Plot: While the plot has interesting elements, so many different elements seem to be competing for the center stage: There is the front story of the relic and Alice, then her relationship with her husband and her secret pregnancy, then the backstory of his family. While it does coalesce, overall it still feels a bit too widespread to truly come together. Readers might have a difficult time parsing out the key elements of the narrative.

    Prose/Style: The prose is a bit old-fashioned, even twee at times, which rubbed the wrong way. It almost sounded older than it needed to be, and while it’s certainly trying to emulate a time period, readers might be too distracted by the antiquated language to really get invested in the characters and plot.

    Originality: This is definitely an original story for most readers today, thanks to the narration; that said, it does introduce questions into the plot that are distracting, such as how the narrator knew all of the information and backstory they did, and why exactly such large portions of each section were dedicated to sharing it.

    Character Development: The characters in this story could use some more dimension to be believable - this could be due to the detached narration (characters are repeatedly introduced as “the man” or “the woman,” which makes it difficult to connect or picture them), or their dialogue, which often feels forced.

  • The Haircut Who Would Be King

    by Robert Trebor

    Rating: 4.00

    Plot: The plot here is succinct. Its division between the experiences of Donald D. Rump and Vladimir Poutine drives the narrative forward. However, the overall delivery of events, though based on some real-life happenings, may not elicit the comedic effect desired.

    Prose/Style: While the piece was quite short, Trebor’s prose was developed and easy to follow. The use of dialogue and exposition was integrated throughout, though perhaps heavier on the dialogue end. Frequency of dialogue exchange was not overly distracting, however, but rather helped move the story to its conclusion.

    Originality: Trebor’s satirical piece is based on real events in some cases, which made this lack in originality in terms of events or plot. However, his imaginings of conversations and events were original and innovative.

    Character Development: Characterization was presented well overall. Dialogue, exposition, and style worked together to equip each main character with distinct qualities, ways of speaking, and mannerisms. However, the minor characters were not very distinct from one another. This did not detract too much from reading the piece, however. An element that could be improved upon is creating empathy between reader and characters. Developing that aspect could make this a stronger piece that resonates better with readers.

  • What If We Were All The Same!

    by C.M. Harris

    Rating: 0.00

    Disqualified due to word count under 30,000.

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